Main topic area:
Independent-living
elderly who receive home based healthcare and those who do not
Main problem identified:
Elderly who are technology-ignorant or does not wish
to be connected are unable to enjoy full benefits of home-based healthcare due
to technological impediment such as the absence of fiber broadband at home
Proposed solution:
Ministry of Health to implement limited free wifi zone
in buildings to allow connectivity of approved medical devices
Proposed thesis:
A group of independent-living elderly are deprived
of Information and Communication Technology (ICT) support due to
their ignorance in technology, Ministry of Health can implement a "limited
free wifi zone" in the building where these elderly reside to allow
connectivity for approved medical devices so as to help these elderly be
connected and to enjoy the full benefits of home-based healthcare.
Hi Angie!!
ReplyDeleteWe find that your proposed solution does not respond to your thesis very well. In your proposed solution, you did not address the problem(s) of "absence of broadband at home"/"monetary incapacity of the elderly" stated in your thesis.
Maybe you can be clearer in your thesis about the problem(s) your solution is trying to address to.
Cheers!!
Loo Yong & Ivy
Hi Loo Yong & Ivy,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the valuable feedback!
Now I have a clearer idea on the direction I can craft my essay :)
Angie