Wednesday 1 October 2014

Essay Prompt Draft 1

Over the years, there is a  __% rise in the numbers of elderly living alone in Singapore. The figures are worrying as there are concerns over the elderly being able to take care of themselves while living alone. With the increased statistics, it also meant that there will be more elderly who are prone to accidents or health risks when they are at home as they are unable to take care of themselves properly. In order to tackle the problem of these accidents or health issues occurring in the elderly's home, home-based healthcare is looked into in this paper as one of the possible solutions to address this problem.

Home-based healthcare is when the elderly at home can receive any form of medical assistance or attention without having to go to a clinic or hospital. These healthcare services are manifested in the form of highly intelligent devices which are also easy-to-use and require minimal or no human effort. (Will include an existing example of such devices, still researching) Devices like the ____, is the collaboration between engineers and medical professionals, and more similar products are suggested to be developed in time to come. The main concern over these products is the ability of the elderly to afford them and the existing technological infrastructure and support in the homes of the elderly. The collaboration between the engineers and medical professionals is able to produce user-friendly medical devices that allow one-stop assistance and immediate call-to-action for elderly who faces health issues at home, yet the monetary incapacity of the elderly is the cause of single-living elderly not being able to receive immediate medical attention for their health issues at home.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Angie,

    Here are our feedback for you! :)

    We understand the problem you are trying to bring across. However, there is no sign of clear divide because we couldn't find any comparison between two parties.

    Perhaps you can consider the following suggestion:
    divide between elderly who have access to the home based healthcare vs elderly who have access(due to monetary reasons or not knowing how to use therefore not installing the device)

    Perhaps you can rephrase your solutions to specifically address the problem due to the divide.

    Hope it helps! :)

    Cheers,
    Lyndsey, Loo Yong, Ivy

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